Post by solocityElectricCyan on Jun 15, 2008 22:58:25 GMT -5
Something I fucking fail at creating.
How do you describe a strong ass winter storm during the night?
The Kuldeep Way:
The snow moved ferociously with the wind, blowing in all directions creating a gentle swarm, mimicking bees gathering at a hive. The snow, only illuminated by the orange of the nearby streetlights. Looking up at the lights, seeing light diffusing through the flakes, and watching them set on the ground. With the fuck this.
Weak and dull, the white light of the moon struggled through the thick cascade of snow. An unrelenting torrent of ice forced its way through the air, cold sovereignty destroyed the warmth. A cold carapace grew upon the land, the final glacial germination.
And yet as the dawn of the final age approached, an eerie silence pervaded Kuldeep's room. A comforting warmth blinded his senses, the impending doom seemed all but a dream. Naïve he lay, unaware of the horror behind the curtains.
I think you're trying too hard to add descriptive words/poetic devices, it's gotta be a natural thing. The flow of your thing is pretty lame too... TRY AGAIN KULDEEP
Never since the winter arrived had there been conciliation; rather, nature's almighty fury seemed fit to prevail at full force. Unforgiving and relentless, a rush of snow concealed the suburb streets that were once my home. The orange illumination of the streetlights provided beacons through the thick mist of powder; they were the only insinuation of a world beyond my bedroom window.
Last Edit: Jun 16, 2008 11:47:49 GMT -5 by Hauskaz
Post by solocityElectricCyan on Jun 17, 2008 10:20:11 GMT -5
The Second Kuldeep Way:
It snowed, hard but soft. Looking up at the sky gives the eye a kind of daze, as every flake moves furiously trying to reach the ground. The streets are quiet, and all you can hear is Lily screaming in the distance.
It snowed, hard but soft. Looking up at the sky gave the eye a kind of daze, but not really. Every flake moved furiously trying to reach the ground, but kinda slow too. The streets were quiet, but not really since all you could hear was Lily screaming in the distance.